Literature
Judge Comments - Round Three
LotusLeif VS legolass1119 5 - 0
LotusLeif:
I've never seen an entry that starts out with the contestant dying (or near-dying, anyway). That's intense. I like how you're using the other characters, the ones that you no longer have an obligation to use. They have stories, too, and its good of you to help get those out. Mitte's injuries are a little confusingly written- I mean, how bad is it that he can be all stitched up, complaining about walking, and then run off alone? But overall, that's really a minor point.
I'm enjoying reading these two plot threads and following them along. Your entries keep the energy up, which is good at this point